The Embrace

dirtgirl
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The Embrace Jun 1, 2002 20:34:02 GMT -5

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Post by dirtgirl on Jun 1, 2002 20:34:02 GMT -5

The Embrace

Salty tears,
Cascading upon skin against skin,
Unspoken desires and deep longings,
Intangibles now realised,
Absorbed through this joyous connection.

Cocooned in our embrace,
The jigsaw puzzle that is Us,
Is finally complete.

Equilibrium is dependent upon our recognition of reality, which is the acceptance of permanent psychic discomfort. And the acceptance of psychic discomfort is the acceptance of consciousness.

luceluna Moderator Fuckup Posts: 453	The Embrace Jun 2, 2002 4:18:02 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by luceluna on Jun 2, 2002 4:18:02 GMT -5 short and sweet (have you ever considered experimenting with punctuation in your work? it might add an edgy dimension )
	I can fly ~ But I want his wings - 'Gabriel'

dirtgirl Senior Member no angels's gonna appear to offer you advice Posts: 102	The Embrace Jun 2, 2002 22:07:47 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by dirtgirl on Jun 2, 2002 22:07:47 GMT -5 How would you edit it, oh grammatical one?
	Equilibrium is dependent upon our recognition of reality, which is the acceptance of permanent psychic discomfort. And the acceptance of psychic discomfort is the acceptance of consciousness.

luceluna Moderator Fuckup Posts: 453	The Embrace Jun 3, 2002 3:23:16 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by luceluna on Jun 3, 2002 3:23:16 GMT -5 Salty tears, Cascading upon skin against skin; Unspoken desires and deep longings. Intangibles now realised, Absorbed through this joyous connection. Cocooned in our embrace, The jigsaw puzzle that is Us Is finally complete.
	I can fly ~ But I want his wings - 'Gabriel'

dirtgirl Senior Member no angels's gonna appear to offer you advice Posts: 102	The Embrace Jun 3, 2002 6:32:50 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by dirtgirl on Jun 3, 2002 6:32:50 GMT -5 Strange but equally valid how rearranging this poem has altered the intent and meaning! hmmmm intriguing......
	Equilibrium is dependent upon our recognition of reality, which is the acceptance of permanent psychic discomfort. And the acceptance of psychic discomfort is the acceptance of consciousness.

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