untitled - 'wishes'. maybe :-)

[BoyVenus]

i don't know what to call this... nothing i can think of seems to fit.  i actually sing it a cappella, because that's how i wrote it at 4 am on the beach one sunday morning :-)

*******

passed you by
by the pleiades
a diamante basket of wishes
something broke
as i stood smoking

4 a.m.
my shadow shivers

i asked a question
it was granted
two wishes fell down
and i answered

asked for you
by the pleiades
pointed in the hay
i painted selfish
tried for peace
as i stood smoking

broke for you
i couldn't help it

i asked a question
it was granted
two wishes fell down
and i answered

in all the millions
tens of millions
my wishes burned out
two syllables

asked a question
it was granted
two wishes fell down
and i answered.

[luceluna]

WOW! that is awesome! what inspiration you must have had...

you get extra marks for the smoking references

dan

[BoyVenus]

it was all legal dan, sure...  

my inspiration... well, i had this tune in my head i'd been playing with, i was visiting my folks and couldn't sleep, and the stars were amazing out on the beach.  and i kinda uttered this little prayer/wish just to see a shooting star, because it had been so long since i had - and just as i did, two of them streaked in front of me.  it was amazing!

so of course, i made my wishes.  neither of which have come to fruition, but you know, i think it was because i'd made my wishes in advance just by wanting to see them lol!

james :-)

[ScaryDan]

my god james that was tops/beautiful/wonderful...i dunno what else to say, but...wow!
xoxo
dan