brutal

[ScaryDan]

afloat on a sea,
words and faces press through the haze.
everything heightened until i am above it all,
not a part, but a divine observer,
part of my consciousness still on the pillow,
where i wish i was,
alone,
with my heart and my mind beside me.

[luceluna]

the circular nature of this poem (the rhyme of first and last lines) is wonderful... the last line is perfect. i hope whatever's inspiring you keeps on doing so, cos this shit is rocking!

[ScaryDan]

i hope it does too