Rala
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Post by Rala on Mar 6, 2002 5:34:18 GMT -5
just a little writing exercise to make you think about what you are writing and using some of those words that you've pushed to the outer edge of your mind and rarely call upon... 'Write a 15-20 line poem without using the letter 'e' for the duration of the entire poem..' Here's my effort to get the ball rolling... A clash. You a backwards girl. Grinding against My swirling foundation. You lick at my formula, Trying to fill a void In your robust cargo. I grip your domain, Pivot within oblong loops, Finding nothing but Cinnamon clouds Confusing my path, With a lullaby whirl-pool. I slash through Your curtain of illusion. With a groan you withdraw. Fluid agility, I slip atop my dais. Cards now in my hands, You just a milky fraud. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Rala  |
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Post by ScaryDan on Mar 7, 2002 3:25:13 GMT -5
this'll take me a while. i'll be back...
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Post by luceluna on Mar 7, 2002 4:28:29 GMT -5
i'll be fucked if i can work out 20 lines of anything tonight, but i will say this: DAYUM, rala! your poem rocks!!!
Grinding against
My swirling foundation.
You lick at my formula,
Trying to fill a void
In your robust cargo...
FUCK!! kickass! ;D
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Post by Poeticsiren on Mar 17, 2002 14:38:40 GMT -5
Yeah, Rala, I agree with Dan...that section of your poem was AWESOME!  good job girlfriend |
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Post by luceluna on Mar 18, 2002 7:35:52 GMT -5
help me!! this poem is seducing me more and more every time i read it! fuck!
With a groan you withdraw.
Fluid agility,
I slip atop my dais.AGH! WOW! |
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Rala
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Post by Rala on Mar 18, 2002 17:40:40 GMT -5
hey guys, Thanks for the fabulous responses! You sure know how to keep someone writing Sorry for haunting you lil Dan! I'm really stoked that you like it though... sooo any of you guys willing to give the exercise a go?? ~~~~~~~~~ Rala ;D |
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Post by joesnuff on Mar 19, 2002 1:49:35 GMT -5
ok ok let me try sumpin..
Words virtually prolific,
hardly thought or wisdom
Binding maids of tradition
Is this fact and not fiction?
If I'm typing till tomorrow
You'll miss our fifth linguistic jot, Mary!
Limits, smutty, fibs, a bit of sorrow
Both sanity and awfully sanitary
Lasting halfway through this criminality
(Criminality is a word, thou untrusting souls)
Rala's analog ball is rolling,
Rolling down a hill it rolls
Look how I put faith mostly in my "ing" and "y"
Slowly unwrapping an uncouth soliloquy
Both lifts of my lips won't stop drooling
Practically touching a warm finish
Though... day upon day might push away spring
If spring ain't a groundhog's wish
FINI
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Post by joesnuff on Mar 19, 2002 2:10:07 GMT -5
well haha dunno if you aussies, kiwis, et al. transatlantic anglo varieties will get the reference to the american holiday at the end there, but at least you might have experienced the bill murray flick. imagine trying to come up with e-less poems everyday for many many years. wait! you didn't say they have to be in english right?  Oun nirk bong min ta yup rir tgnai.. Oun nirk pross tlai kroup.. Oun nirk bong nass na kio pumgnia.. Nirk bong kroup kria kmian pali na sbuy.. Bong uy uy bong oun sain srolanh.. Srolanh huy knanh min ta pali na.. Jong stuss tov oub nabi net kai-ya.. Jong joub piktra bong rol tgnai.. ( here's the best part - ) Srolanh mias snaih jiang jivit oun.. Jong tnak tnom snaih min ouy sroponi.. Los jivit son kor nov taih snaih.. Bair sin jiad niss oun mian somnang.. Ban bong tnak tnom tvir jia kui.. Pit jia sab bai mian ayuk yirn yu.. Ban bong jia kui tov niy anakut any cambodians out there to translate? |
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Post by Ariela on Mar 19, 2002 3:51:06 GMT -5
That is cheating, Joe!!!!!!! Translation, please. Running through a cold air rush Trying not to do a jig Snuggling up to you It sucks but hey, you got poetry outta me.  |
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Post by luceluna on Mar 19, 2002 4:50:53 GMT -5
yay! i love this thread so much! poetry from joe and dana?? all my christmasses have come at once! ;D i really liked yours, dana... you should write more, dammit! and joe: look, we all know you're a genius, but do you have to ram it down our throats?! that's actually the first time i've read Cambodian... kickass language... i think i'm in love with. i take it you're fluent? i second the call for a translation |
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Rala
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Post by Rala on Mar 19, 2002 17:26:21 GMT -5
Yaaay! finally some poetry emerges! Well done Joe and Ariela! (and yes I think a translation is necessary indeed! ) ... Wooo, keep the ball rolling guys..! ~~~~~~~~~ Rala ;D |
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Post by joesnuff on Mar 20, 2002 4:01:52 GMT -5
LOL... dudes, i have NO idea what that says. i nabbed it off of a cambodian board of love poetry. i know a few swear words in cantonese, that's as close as it gets! lol. but i do have a cambodian friend, if i can get a hold of her maybe i can get a translation.
j
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Post by luceluna on Mar 20, 2002 8:08:18 GMT -5
LMAO... i still like the language, dammit!
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Post by dirtgirl on Apr 7, 2002 4:32:10 GMT -5
...a tiny Capital boy, missing orgasmic origami...  watch out for frisky groundhogs, jo (silent 'e') snuff! look mum, no 'e's'!! |
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Post by Rala on Apr 8, 2002 5:55:24 GMT -5
Words still haunting you Dan? Ahhh... Just remember to breath and you'll be alright ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Rala ;D |
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